Villanelle Poem – my second attempt of writing this poem form, please see my first attempt.
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I sat in my garden sipping freshly brewed coffee
Gazing at the wall of tall cypress trees
Such peaceful feeling surrounded by greenery and fragrances
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Purple lavender swaying in spring morning breeze
Burgundy roses answered by bouncing their smiley faces
I sat in my garden sipping freshly brewed coffee
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The birds perched on the neighbor’s pepper trees
Chirping and echoing each other’s songs of love
Such peaceful feeling surrounded by greenery and fragrances
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Bundles of green grapes waited patiently to be ripened
The weight of the growing plums bended the branches
I sat in my garden sipping freshly brewed coffee
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A hummingbird flapped his wings sixty times a second
Sustained himself dipping the long beak into the nectar
Such peaceful feeling surrounded by greenery and fragrances
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A family of lizards roamed on the ground and the walls
Colorful butterflies danced The Blue Danube of Johann Strauss
I sat in my garden sipping freshly brewed coffee
Such peaceful feeling surrounded by greenery and fragrances
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The highly structured villanelle is a nineteen-line poem with two repeating rhymes and two refrains. The form is made up of five tercets followed by a quatrain. The first and third lines of the opening tercet are repeated alternately in the last lines of the succeeding stanzas; then in the final stanza, the refrain serves as the poem’s two concluding lines.
Thank you very much, Mick. I think I fell in love with this poem form. I wanted to write another one already. I only wrote the first and the third line of the first stanza to remind myself!
Thank you, Cee! When I went to my niece’s wedding at a vineyard, I noticed that they kept the branches short, so the grapes get the most from each bush. So this year, I kept trimming the vines back, the grapes did get bigger!
I think that’s beautifully written and really brings out what you can see, smell and feel, and I like the repetition of the “freshly brewed coffee” line. ♥
Thank you so much for liking it! It is the pattern of this poem. The first and third line in the first stanza repeat alternatively in the following stanzas, and repeat again in the final stanza.
Did you change your profile picture? 🙂
Thanks, glad you like it! Took me ages to find something I liked. It was a free theme that I tinkered around with. Just had to pay for the domain and webhosting. x
Oh, now I see it. You don’t have WP. I can change to .com also. I paid for one year of membership to get fast service, .com is included. I should take it before one year is expired! I’ll do it tomorrow!
I have hosting from a 3rd party provider for my WordPress blog, but I had to pay again to transfer my domain (all got rather confusing after a while!) If you have .com then you should take advantage of it 🙂
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Lovely, Miriam…
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Thank you so much, Bette!
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What a fabulous poem some challenge Cee. Nicely done!
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Thank you for reading. That was my first try of this poem form. It was fun. Miriam
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So nice to reach your blog it would have been very sad 😦
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Hooray, you are on!!!!! So glad to see you and problem solved!
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It’s excellent!
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WHOA! i nearly clicked the more share button, it is what i wanted to say. i saw it, i want more, i nearly, but i didn’t… encore, encore!
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Thank you very much, Mick. I think I fell in love with this poem form. I wanted to write another one already. I only wrote the first and the third line of the first stanza to remind myself!
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Villanelle Poem inspired by your good self, thanks Miriam
I PONDER
with little effort i pondered the world!
its trials its tribulations, going back to its beginnings.
i sit all mid days meditating, transcending all evil!
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done i ponder, i ponder all manner of life forms,
i always come back to us human beings, homo sapiens
with little effort i ponder the world!
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i pondered on evolution, diversity, all nature
did we evolve the power of reason if we did we took the wrong path
i sit all mid days meditating, transcending all evil!
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i pondered i ponder my wife the rest of my life i pondered
my son i pondered his future no worries he’s got a good job
with little effort i pondered the world!
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then there is my first daughter, i ponder, she’s married a girl and a son
then there is my second daughter, i ponder, she’s married a boy three girls
i sit all mid days meditating, transcending all evil!
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nights closing, i ponder, I ponder the dark, I pondered sin
when did evil begin, with darkness or light, no evil began with a yes
with little effort i pondered the world
did we evolve the power of reason if we did we took the wrong path
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© Mick E Talbot 2077/66
inspired by Miriam Hurdle
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Great job! Write some more! Did you see my other new poem form Pantoum?
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I have nominated you for the Versatile Award. You very well deserve this and I just wanted to let you know about it. http://jeyranmain.com/2017/05/the-versatile-blogger-award-2/
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Thank you so much. It’s very considerated of you!
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Beautiful! 😍
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I’m glad you like it. Thank you!
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😀 You make me want to try it!
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Someone tried it, liked it, and made three poems, more ambitious than me. Of course I have other jobs to do. He may just did blogging…humm
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Oh, that’s great! 😊 Haha, that’s understandable though. 🙂
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Even made one with my name as title and had my name all over the poem!
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😀 Is that the one you reblogged? If it was, I read that one and it was really cool!
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No, I wrote this one! I reblogged the one entitled “Miriam.” He wrote one to tribute to me! hehe…
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Ooohhhh. I see! 🙂
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He was teasing me!
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Haha! 😄
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That what I would say!!!
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So lovely!!!
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Thank you so much! I had fun writing it!
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Beautiful poem and those grapes looks yummy 😀
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Thank you, Cee! When I went to my niece’s wedding at a vineyard, I noticed that they kept the branches short, so the grapes get the most from each bush. So this year, I kept trimming the vines back, the grapes did get bigger!
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Beautiful
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Thank you so much!
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Serene and beautiful. Thank you for sharing such a lovely moment.
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Thank you, Kim! The weather was right. It was a pleasant morning!
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Beautiful poem .I found this type of poem complex ,may be some day I will try to write .
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Thank you! The second time was easier than my first time!
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I think that’s beautifully written and really brings out what you can see, smell and feel, and I like the repetition of the “freshly brewed coffee” line. ♥
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Thank you so much for liking it! It is the pattern of this poem. The first and third line in the first stanza repeat alternatively in the following stanzas, and repeat again in the final stanza.
Did you change your profile picture? 🙂
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I think it works really well!
Yes, new profile picture after changing my blog template – thought I’d freshen up the logo and header 🙂
Caz x
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Oh Caz, let me see your new theme!
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I like it. It looks neat and clear, and many good features! Did you have to pay?
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Thanks, glad you like it! Took me ages to find something I liked. It was a free theme that I tinkered around with. Just had to pay for the domain and webhosting. x
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Oh, now I see it. You don’t have WP. I can change to .com also. I paid for one year of membership to get fast service, .com is included. I should take it before one year is expired! I’ll do it tomorrow!
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I have hosting from a 3rd party provider for my WordPress blog, but I had to pay again to transfer my domain (all got rather confusing after a while!) If you have .com then you should take advantage of it 🙂
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Yes, I wrote to them last night. I’ll check my email! Thank you!
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Such pretty and peaceful descriptions, Miriam. I wish I was having coffee in your garden with you.
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So do I, Robbie! I wish I had company! You’re invited to my garden tea party!
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Lovely composition Miriam. I was so tempted to come into your garden😊
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I’ll have a garden tea party, you’re cordially invited!!!
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😇💜
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🙂 xoxo
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